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Markéta N. | Poetry's avatar

I love how you used the crossed linw

imarkanx || istvan markan 🍁's avatar

Thank you. I was trying to find a way to better indicate the speaker, the voice, is not entirely a reliable narrator. The literal meanings of the words are not the entire truth revealed.

Markéta N. | Poetry's avatar

*line

Jen Reich's avatar

Sending care

imarkanx || istvan markan 🍁's avatar

I appreciate the kind thoughts. This is an older poem so not a current state. I am glad the weight still comes through.

Azure Jo Storm's avatar

I feel this piece heavy, very well done.

Stephanie M. Vargo's avatar

Loneliness and exile. No roots. There is sadness in this.

Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

“Forged from emptiness” is a brutal ending. The freedom here doesn’t feel triumphant so much as armored—a self made untouchable because belonging became too dangerous. That tension between strength and exile gives the poem its ache.

a. jensen's avatar

Love this! The last stanza packs such a punch 🥊 ✨